“I really like the energy in this video and I wish to see it as a performance in real life sometime one day.”
“Here is my feedback. In this 5-minute short video of contemporary dance mixed with work with clay performance, directed by Jamal Suleiman, we watch a kind of a circular story, that starts where it ends.
It starts with a box of clay and ends with it.”
“The change is clear in the end that we see the dancers around the clay player / manipulator. Playing with clay is initiating the appearance of the dancers and slowly we get to know little about their rituals/work, they are wearing formal suits plus there are no real interactions or revealing of any kind of emotions, they are mechanical in what they are doing, so we do not get deep and intimate in our relation to them and to what they are doing. “
“In between these two actions, sequences of positioning figures of clay on a table by clay player/manipulator while on stage a sequence of movements/kind of rituals are taking place.”
“Regarding choreography and presence, I do appreciate the precision of dancers that was sustained throughout the whole piece and the variations of actions in a short film, well done!”
“However, I did not see a developed work with material, the figures were ready-made in advance which I felt pity for; there was no interaction between the manipulator and the material itself apart from touching, pressing, positioning, holding, turning and pointing, which can be done with any object. So why to choose clay if we do not explore its possibilities in expression? We did not see the potential of using such material on stage I am sorry to say. What would happen if there were more variations on how to work with the clay: rough movement, destruction, changing shape, etc. For approaching the clay, what would this add?! I would love to see more details from the work with clay and to take the time for actions to be understood.”
“Regarding to camera work, it was very interesting and exciting work, even though I would love to really give more time for the moments with clay and show more details. Divide the camera between dancers and clay in some parts when needed might be helpful!”
“Regarding the music, choice of electro music gave a trans circular repetitive feeling that fits with the routine concept conveyed by the repetitive movements and rituals by dancers on stage.”
“Regarding the lighting, especially the cold blue color for dancers and warm color for the clay, this contrast created balance somehow but what does it communicate for us as viewers? Moreover, I did not understand the reason behind choosing moving light on the floor.”
“Regarding the space, the dancers start to move in the moment that the clay player is pushing the piece of wood towards the clay box at 0:26 simultaneously. Where are they coming from?! Are they brought to the stage/trap by the one who is playing with clay? If yes, Why are they really pushed to this routine?”
“Regarding the costume, dancers in formal clothes, are they going to work!? So what kind of space is it? Did the choice of clothes for the clay player add any meaning or created contrast?”
“Regarding the relation of the movements of dancers and the clay player, I do appreciate the contrast between synchronized mechanical sharp movements on stage and the delicate sensual approach towards the hands’ movements around/on the clay material with minimum sharp movements yet gentle. However, this did not make the character of the one playing with clay clear enough and if it was a manipulator for the bodies too or not or just someone who is mimicking what is happening. This was not clear by the actions, timing and costumes choice.”
“Regarding playing with clay in relationship to the movements of bodies, the choice was not clear if the actions are happening simultaneously or the clay sequence is provoking what’s happening on stage or the other way around. We could see these three options have been used without building a clear system of communication.”
“Regarding the relation clay and body, I think at the beginning, the voodoos game alike manipulation could add more players to the performance and convey maybe meanings of power relations and authority, God maybe; if playing with the clay is initiating and provoking the movements on stage and if this was sustained in the whole piece. In some moments, I felt this manipulator of clay figures was controlling the bodies on stage for some reason that was not revealed which does not have to be clear too. Also the relation between them and if they are at the same level of power or in different levels also was not clear. The power relation can be understood at the beginning of the video/performance for example, but it was not well developed as in some places the dancers were moving before the action was done on the clay in later stage which made me confused about the choice.”
“Noticeably, there was one moment of interaction between the dancers and the clay player when the dancers decided to go and look at what the clay player is doing with the box of clay. I wonder if the dancers would interact with let us say their clay figures what would happen then? It was a very interesting moment when the camera combined both dancers and clay in one shot, or even to project the figures on the clay. If it would be possible even to project each dancer on one figure of the clay what can this add to us as viewers and to the meaning?”
Regarding the relation between dancers themselves, my questions are Is there any? If yes, what kind of relation is it? How to develop it further? Regarding the relation between dancers and clay player, there was little interaction between the dancers and the clay player until the end of video/performance when suddenly they surrounded the manipulator after pulling the box of clay up in the air away from the table by the clay player. This was following two moments of interactions even touching between the dancers. The first when two dancers shake hands and the other when all of them gather and connect their arms in a central point. Was this kind of agreement to change the routine? What does the manipulator want to show or tell them by pointing at the box? How can this be read through the actions of the dancers on stage and their movement in the end and even throughout the piece?”
– Husam Abed – Theatre director, Puppeteer and Musician, Founder Member of Dafa Puppet Theatre (Jordan), Member of Amman Theatre Lab (Jordan), Arab Puppet Theatre Foundation (Lebanon), UNIMA (France), Co-founder of NARA music group in Prague